Used to

by Hollow Emotion   Aug 12, 2009


I used to think my life revolved around you,
as long as I had you, nothing else mattered.
Everything changed in a blink of an eye.
Then in an instant, everything shattered.

I used to think I could trust you,
That everything you told me was true.
Some of the lies you came up with were clever,
but most were never thought through.

I used to think I would never let go,
That the pain would remain the rest of my life.
I made it to the point where I didn't really care,
Then I reached for a sharp knife.

I used to think about you all the time,
I continued to hope you would return.
You never seized to disappoint me,
I guess this is a lesson I had to learn.

I used to think what we had was perfect,
No matter what happened, nothing could go wrong.
Then your turned into a guy I wanted no part of,
So my only choice was to stay strong.

I used to think by knowing the answers,
They would only make me cry.
Now that I know the answers,
I'm finding it easier to say goodbye.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Kuro

    Devastatingly sad. but well written. the feeling of betrayal is a hard thing to forget. thanks for sharing
    ~Ben

  • 15 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    I like this. Good expression of a good thing turned bad. Really good work. Real talent.

  • 15 years ago

    by xXxemzxXx

    You have an amazing talent and you write very expressingly i love it, you take everything you feel and put it into text and create a peace of art out of it i love your work 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    Ah, hell. I sent it too soon. Could you delete that for me, please? lol. My bad.

    I used to think my life revolved around you,
    as long as I had you, nothing else mattered.
    Everything changed in a blink of an eye.
    Then in an instant, everything shattered.
    ^Good beginning, it catches the reader's eye and you're drawn into it.

    I used to think I could trust you,
    That everything you told me was true.
    Some of the lies you came up with were clever,
    but most were never thought through.

    I used to think I would never let go,
    That the pain would remain the rest of my life.
    I made it to the point where I didn't really care,
    Than I reached for a sharp knife.
    ^"Than" should be "Then" I think it sounds better...

    I used to think about you all the time,
    I continued to hope you would return.
    You never seized to disappoint me,
    I guess this is a lesson I have to learn.
    ^I didn't like the last line here, you changed it from past tense to present, I would change it to "I guess this was a lesson I had to learn." instead.

    I used to think what we had was perfect,
    No matter what happened, nothing could go wrong.
    Then your turned into a guy I wanted no part of,
    So the only choice was to be strong.
    ^Hmm, I might change the last line to "So my only choice was to stay strong" The "my" makes it more personal, and the "stay" strong I just thought sounded better and helped the flow.

    I used to think by knowing the answers,
    They would only make me cry.
    Now that I know the answers,
    I'm finding it easier to say goodbye.
    ^This was a good ending; it flows well with the rest of the poem.

    Overall, I liked it. It was really well done.

  • 15 years ago

    by shadowed heart

    I dont really think you have to add more its amazing how it is!

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