With One

With one kiss you made me yours
With one word you tore my heart
With one thought you closed the doors
With one kiss I knew you'd part"

First line: This was a good opening line, it brought the reader in.

Second line: This was a bit cliche, maybe use a synonym for "tore"?

Third line: This is well-expressed.

Fourth line: The wording here I liked, the repeat of "with one" didn't bother me, this poem was short enough that it fit it well.

"With one hand you said forever
With one finger you said I do
With one touch you broke our ever
With one glance I knew the truth"

First line: Uniquely worded, this is so sweet.

Second line: "you said I do" was kind of plain to me, add more imagery and descriptions.

Third line: I really didn't like the "ever" part at the end, it just didn't fit. I know you wanted this to rhyme but I just felt "ever" wasn't right.

Fourth line: This is a heartbreaking ending, leaving the reader on a very sad note.

Overall, 4/5 from me. The rhymes were good and the flow too, and I liked how easily this could be read (it was filled with feeling), but it was short on imagery and creativity, and as I stated earlier, some of the wording was a bit cliche in places, not in all though.

Keep writing, always and forever...

~MaryAnne