She sleeps a hallow sleep
As she gently weeps
on the outside she says she fine
but her eyes give her away
this makes me sleep a hallow sleep
this make me gently weep
all i want is are eyes to meet.

"Hollow" and "Our" eyes mispelled... but other than that... its great! :)

Strange how eyes can exemplify our emotions so well right?
Its actually very short... but thats what gives it so much more meaning to it. Great write! :)

Id love to hear more from you!

Lol yeah not the best speller in the world but thanks for pointing it out lol, and thee will be more im just thinking of how to right the second part of it.