You have a really good way with words. for a 14 yr old you certainly do surprise me. ^_^

don't let your talent be overcome with corrupt with making good poetry. only write when you feel it is right. and i can feel it. this feels right.

good job
~Ben

Awww thx. :)
that means alot.

Great poem, really well written, full of love and desire. One comment to make, if you spaced it out it a bit more, made it into verses it would have more impact, at the moment it feels very rushed and jumbled together.

I really enjoy your writing! Keep up the good work!