True Class (Senryu)

Ingrid,

Syllable count right.
Good title.
Strong mess.....

No, I'm just joking - I wouldn't dare to presume to offer you any advice on form. This is an excellent senryu which I enjoyed.
All the very best and I hope you are well,
Ben

Such a very special little piece..this is the form u said i did well with..but if mine was perfect
then for god sake tell me what should I name this !

by God's most gifted ??
ur one of the most gifted..
its a shame u dont write anymore/
despite your reasons which I know..

you must get back to the stage
5/5

Very well done senryu..In only a few words you have penned a beautiful piece that project a strong message.
Keep up the great work.
An enjoyable read.
Paul...

Wonerfully Done Senryu Ingrid!!!

Nicely done.
I can't say much more then what has been said. You were able to say so much in a difficult form .