Ask

Wow.. like I actually got teary-eyed when I read this because this has all kinda been happening with me and my boyfriend recently.

"When I send you all those songs
I'm sending you verity.
And when I hint there's something wrong
I want you to seek clarity."

^Sometimes on my MySpace I'll put song lyrics up that actually say how I'm feeling about life or my relationship or whatever it may be. And I put them up there in the hopes that someone, usually my boyfriend, will read it and ask me what's wrong.

"Sometimes I try avoiding stuff
by saying very little
and when I say it's enough,
really I'm still brittle."

^Oftentimes when someone does ask me what's wrong, even though there is something wrong, I can't tell them, so I just say nothing and that I'm fine, when really I'm not.

"I find my teeth begin to grind
when I become upset.
My marbles I can't seem to find
as my eyes start to wet."

^This just reminds me of all the upsetting phone calls that I've had and how when I get upset my teeth do start to grind and my eyes start watering, and all the while the person on the opposite side of the phone has no clue.

"Just asking how my day went
let's me know it's okay.
Think of all the hours I've spent
asking for help each day."

^Sometimes that's all we want; just for someone to ask us how we are or how our day went, to actually make it seem like they care and are interested in what we have to say.

Overall, a beautiful poem! I related to everything 100%. It also has great flow, and simple, yet beautiful vocabulary. Amazing job. :)

-Anna

I meant to say..
I didnt really like that line cause stuff is not the most poetic word. That goes for words like 'so' as well or 'things'

A good poem though overall - I just wanted to point that out to you :)

'Sometimes I try avoiding stuff'