How beautifully written, Silvia:)

Such beautiful wording in this and it describes the immense impact of the erupting vulcano on the surrounding landscape to a tee.

Legend says when the goddess is angry,
she roars to life, eruptions occur,
and Pele has been angry for many decades.

^^
This gave such a sweet touch to the poem. To think of those people seeking a logical explanation, without the means to truly investigate what happens. We should never make fun of these people, because in spite of all our modern technology, we are still in the dark about so many events as well.

A lovely read on this sunny Sunday:)

Thanks for sharing,

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Your poem's a moving painting of the awesome reality of volcanic eruptions, beautiful and deadly at the same time. We in the safety of our suburban homes, forget the power and ferocity of this phenomenon. But your poem made it real for me.

Randy
5/5

Wow did you ever do an excellent job on this one. Very descriptive, providing the reader very clear images as to what you're talking about. Absolutely loved the imagery in this one, it was perfect. Everything very well done. I'm extremely impressed, you have blown me away, this is a great nature poem.

I love this story poem of nature. It draws
ancient images for the reader to see & feel.
An excellent write *claps*

Very strong writing - Both sections make me feel like I'm near the edge of a crater, watching them erupt! It must be something to see - from the safety of a helicopter, that is!
;-)

This was a magnificently penned. Like watching it all happen. The imagery was so realistic. Very Impressive

This is an amazing write... Very descriptive of a volcano and it's power... with vivid images. Loved it! Wonderfully written... :)

Olwin.

This sounds kind of like a narrative over a documentary than a poem to a certain degree:
Lines like this

'Still a very barren landscape, not the moonscape of 1981,'

Support that.

I think the idea of two contrasting volcanos is a great idea, and you do your job in creating the images of destruction of what volcanos leave in their aftermath.

I don't know really what to suggest, other than I don't feel it's 'poetic', more prose kind of a feel to it. It's consistent for what it is. It delivers what you intended but if it was a poem, then you might want to consider using more poetic techinques.

It is well writte, Sylvia. Original, too. I have no suggestions on the sentence structures. But maybe you could consider it to being two small contrasting pieces of prose, instead of poetry.