Inside the Other Room.

"Invisible flow
continuous currents
of silent cadences
and unseen shadows
bound by the virgin rhythm
of after life.
Dancing, flying, murmuring."

This was beautiful wording that held so much meaning and had me captivated and yearning for more.

"The pen pours the lyrics
and the soul sings.
Poetry"

I liked how you wrote that first line, it was worded differently.

Second line: I would suggest making the period a comma or no punctuation, I think it would read better. A comma though will give just the right pause needed.

"Torrential rain
Infinite pain
Smoke running
rising, falling, choking,
through streams of blood
damned inside the veins."

I liked how here and in the first stanza you list three verbs, that was descriptive.

Also, the first two lines held my interest. I haven't heard of "torrential" before and the little rhyme here was good, rain and pain. Although you didn't do this with the first stanza?

"Day clouds the mind,
and night makes heart a shadow,
It doesn't even ache.
Life"

Love how you repeat this style, it was very unique.

First and second line: I liked here how you didn't say "the day clouds my mind", like I thought you would, instead you worded it differently, it just sounded beautifully and still got what you wanted to say across. The second line was stunning, much meaning held there.

I would suggest again in the second to last line adding a comma, not a period. Just my opinion though.

"Dreams undreamt,
promises never made,
hope unfulfilled,
shining, dimming, stopping
in the hallucinating corridors of the mind."

The last line I must say was the most striking and creative, I just could picture and start to imagine all you are saying and making the reader feel.

"Light will break through,
chains would be broken.
Life will move on, to the other side.
Love,

free and true."

Second line: "would" did not fit here, maybe change to "will"?

I like how in these last few lines you give hope and inspiration, that is always a plus.

5/5 from me, the wording was what really gave this poem power and passion, a joy to read, keep it up!

Take care and God bless you, Child of God!

~MaryAnne