That was really good. It's the kind of poem that makes you think. I read it twice and, for 15 mins after, my mind was in a daze just running the poem over in my mind. I really enjoyed it.

The only thing I would change is at the end don't put "and walk away". Just leave it. But it was great

Wow. Again, you have this strong energy in your pieces that just makes me addicted. I need to hear more from you.
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5/5

I love it. it was creativew and had alot of feeling.

You should take out And walk away in the last line but thats just my opinion
Its sounds better
5/5