The last verse is missing a statement I think it should be bloody minded yet leaves me flat.

I taste blood...
from the broken heart,
like a dozen knives in my chest.
The pain is finally gone.

perhaps

I taste blood...
from my broken heart,
that is like a dozen knives in my chest.
forcing all my pain to finally go.

Blind agony of the heart what do you think?

Wow I love the ending! Good!

I know the taste of the blood..but using blood to your piece. i pictured out alot of things... ofcourse the STRONG powerful emotion of every stanza is strike me, stunning me and feel your piece.

KEEP IT UP

Wow i really liked it the pain in your words was so vivid i mean you expressed what you wanted to say so easily great job! i loved it 5/5