I Wish I loved You Better

Very nice poem :) I enjoyed it very much. The worst thing that can happen is to lose someone you love. It's NOT fun. And, it can sometimes be very releasing to let all your hurt out in a poem. I think you did a wonderful job releasing all your feelings out.

I wish I wouldn't let you go.
Oh how I wish that I had swallowed my pride
that time
And instead of just saying "Go",I must have said
"Stay".

^I thought that was a pretty good ending stanza. Most people don't say what they really mean when someone is leaving them.

Also, I thought the ( ) were very unique and different. It is something that trademarks that this poem is yours. It's different and I don't see many people put those into their poems.

Overall, brilliant work on this piece. It is quite beautiful and unique. I enjoyed it fully. 5/5!

P.s...sorry it took me so long to get back to you.

This poem was strong. With the first line I already felt this heavy lump. In the first stanza I think your missing a word.

I left a part myself in yesterday.
*I think it should say,
I left a part OF myself in yesterday.

The second stanza was pretty good except the way the text was put in there it didn't really tie into the flow of the poem for me.

The third stanza was my favorite but I personally think you should just end the poem after the word "Go." It adds so much more to the poem I think

Nice job! Keep writing
5/5
Kaila

Your emotions are epressed very eloquently in this poem and I would not change a thing

For me it kinda hard to read
And this part:
They are waarm.My favorite
-you got double "A"s
-I think adding the words "my favorite" makes it harder to read.

another part:
"Sweetie,I've never loved anyone like I love you"
- "I love" should be "I loved" or "how I loved"
because I think it has to be past tense

But you know,
I know how you feel
cuz' I know that feeling
Regrets

4/5

(I Feel You)
Photos seems to be alive

*I would change this to "photos seem to come alive" That sounds better to me. But I like the idea.*

I'm watching the one where you and me
Having picnic in the forest

*They way you put these too lines was wordy. You used alot of words you didn't need. I would say

"I'm looking at the one of us
Having a picnic in the forest"

That seems to flow so much better to me and it's a sad but beautiful image as well.*

God,how I wish to come back to that day..
I left a part myself in yesterday.

*I love this part. It's really sad and I saee what you mean about how you lost a part of yourself in old memories. Very clever idea.*

(I terribly miss you)
Reading again and again
the texts you once wrote.
They are waarm.My favorite:
"Sweetie,I've never loved anyone like I love you"
The sadness and emptiness I try to fulfill with words you
once told.

*This was such an emotional stanza. one thing I would so is break down some of the sentences you used and make them smaller so they will flow with the rest of the poem better. Other than that I think talking about the txt messages was a good and personal touch*

(I wish I loved you better)
I wish I wouldn't let you go.
Oh how I wish that I had swallowed my pride that time
And instead of just saying "Go",I must have said
"Stay".

*Aww this ending is heartbreaking. I think you did a good job with expressing your feelings here. You have good ideas I would just work on how you word them. Other than that nice work. Nik*