by KomBAT Kitten Aug 23, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
He loves me, he loves me not |
by BlueJay
In a way, I know what this feels like. This piece is relatable to a lot of people in a lot of different ways, so good job with that. The style is interesting. The flow is well done, but seems to stray in a few places.Emotion is defiantly present, as is your voice. All in all this is a fantastic piece, though I believe it could have been more personalized or unique. I like it but I gave it a 4/5 |
That was cool cause i have the same feeling with my dad he is there but not really gets me in so many ways |
by Biya
A sad poem ... very well written .. I wish good for u.. 5/5 |
by The Undoing
It was depressingly beautiful. You evoke image really well and ibe was right, you do have the flow right. It was definitely a winner. |
by Love Panda
The ending was a little abrupt, but that just put the thought of the question shooting through the readers mind. nicely done by the way. the flow was even and the words used were the perfect choice. |