Comments : Retarded lies

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    The genius of truth ,the retardation of lies

    *I love this line. I hardly ever hear people
    using the word retardation. I think it's a flawless contrst between the two. Very clever. *

    may be so incredibly easy to disguise
    that the earth is in constant conflict
    about the change that man can inflict

    *This part is soo true. People are always trying to change the world. People need to realize it's not the world that needs changing it's people.

    Though the light that gathers may not escape
    The disillusioned attempt to alter its shape

    *I love this line, flawlessly crafted :) *

    as if they could control the entire fate
    of what awaits us at heavens gate

    *I like that you said "heaven's gate" I thought that was an intresting way to say that.*

    If the planet gets too warm
    the inhabitants must conform
    Or face a certain extinction date
    when the genius of truth comes too late

    *I liked this poem. It had a very important messgae that was easy to undertsnad. I liked the style and the simple rhyming of it. Nice work. Nik*