I like the form mat. the secound vers is wise. amazing work:)

I really really liked this, the whole thing is really interesting, It flowed well and I just wanted to keep reading and reading more. My favorite thing about this poem is how it ends. It wraps up the whole poem perfectly, Its the way every poem should end and makes the whole read shine. Your a great writer. keep up the good work.

Review another of mine and i will yours.

thx for reading my poem beautiful taint.

I also wanted to keep reading this. i wasn't bored at all and it was just really awesome how you kept the readerrs attention! great job! keep it up! :)