I love the way you wrote this, the way you used the same words and gave them different meanings was grate! nice job!

Nicly structured and wording was good.
i would of liked to have seen more stanzas, as i was a little dissapointed that your poem was so short.

nicly done.

IBE
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5-good ryme. i thought it was good!

Love it, 5/5. Em x