Wow that was an amazing poem. the way it was written was also amazing. i loved it

Very well written. Loved the whole thing. Keep writing.

I'm still trying to figure out how I feel about this poem. Some aspects of it I really liked;
For example:

"The disturbing flavor of the alcohol that I from my mind erased..."
"The fierce footsteps are blocked by the pondering of my heart..."
"Dragged back into this black hole after I came so far..."

^^ These lines are particular really caught my attention. The first line because it's creates a sense of familiarity; at least for myself. Sometimes during our weakest and saddest moments, we turn to alcohol to ease the pain and erase the memories which are hurting us. We later come to realise, however, that this is not a solution, thus the alcohol has turned and is now hurting us.

The second line I just really enjoyed; it creates the impression that the narrator's heart is still strong, although maybe broken and damaged.

The third line evokes such a strong sense of sympathy from the reader. It's like when you're so close to achieving something and then out of nowhere it's snatched from you; devastating you. It was very easy to relate to.

Parts of the poem which I didn't like so much were:

The rhyming. Sometimes, in my opinion, it seemed forced. Try not to think about what you're writing, try to not force it to rhyme and just go with the flow and see what you end up with.

Far too many commas! Haha, this is probably just me being picky, but I look at your poem and see commas everywhere. I don't always think they're needed.

Overall, an enjoyable read. :)

I really liked this poem. i don't know if you read my post in the contest topic, but i feel like there was several things i could relate to on this. i loved your word choice and the imagery. i just to let you know that sometimes i fell the exact same way. you really did a good job on this. you should write more like it and let me know. thanks for sharing
~Ben

Such an emotional yet powerful poem, 5/5. Em

That was an amazing poem. I especially loved that amount of emotion emanating from my screen. 5/5

That was an amazing poem. I especially loved that amount of emotion emanating from my screen. 5/5