Comments : Tranquility

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    This one is such a lovely write...

    Turn around to a beautiful sunrise,
    A soft breeze - the wind is gentle,
    The first light - a fire in my eyes,
    And I'm left feeling sentimental,

    ^^ loved the imagery here... the sunrise marking a beautiful and hopeful start of another jouney with the cool winds to sooth... :) well penned... but in the last line I felt sentimental was being forced... just my opinion...

    A world is born anew on this day,
    No more tears are left to shed,
    Just cheers and soft words to say,
    All of the nightmares are dead,

    ^^another lovely para on hope ... I love these kind of lines that emanates positiveness and optimistic attitude to life...

    Take one more breath and release,
    Now hold close each new friend,
    This dream is formed on peace,
    A heaven that will never end...

    ^^ if we all help close then this heaven will surely never end :)

    wonderful write up :)