I can not recover

---Okay. I'm very detailed in my comments, so prepare yourself lol---

"I'm waiting for these years
to pass by so I can live again.
I tried to smile boldly
and pretend we can just be friends.
But it's never that simple
to make the suffering end."
Hmm.. I enjoyed this stanza. It was very well done, but just one little thing I might change would be to change "the" to "this" in the last line, it makes it more personal. (:

"A rhyme I lay to keep
from cracking into my subconscious
where twisted thoughts
reside..thoughts I don't want to think about.
I miss you...but what good is that now
I feel like I'm lost
to the waves above the sea..."
Ooh I did not care for this one.. it is good, but could definitely be better. Can i try this?
"A rhyme I lay to keep
from cracking into my subconscious
where twisted thoughts reside
..things I don't want to remember.
I miss you.. but what good is that now?
I feel like I am lost
to the waves above the sea.."

"Will someone ever find me?"
^Perfect.

"First floating
slowly drowning
completely swallowing
gallons of sour sea water--
my lungs now water balloons
my life soggy from the exposure. "
I would change "slowly" to "Then" but thats just me, it isn't a necessary change, as none of these are. Also, I would change "my lungs" to simply "lungs" because the repetition in "my lungs" and then again in "my life" just didn't sit right with me.

"I can not recover. "
Love it.

These are all simply thoughts, if you don't like it or it doesn't reflect what you're trying to express, by all means, ignore it. (:
I'm just here to give my opinion.

I liked it though, overall it was well done in my opinion and I feel the random lines you through into the poem really tied it together nicely. Well done.

I liked the format of this poem. i get so sick of four lines per stanza i refuse to read them anymore and i also like how you didnt force it to rhyme i dont like forcd poetry. anyway i liked this poem as i can relate to it especially
"I tried to smile boldly
and pretend we can just be friends.
But it's never that simple
to make the suffering end.:" so true and heartfelt
and also the plea " will someone ever find me" i also liked the imagery of the last stanza as i also have found myself drowning beneath my sorrow. all in all a refreshing read as it was different and quite good

I could feel the emotion allthrough the poem and found the flow enhanced the delivery

Wow. for a moment i swore i was the one drowning. the build up and the flow of the poem are amazing. well done.

Great poem.loved it.