I really enjoyed this. I felt that some people might be turned off because of the length but I wasn't. I felt you ytold a story and you told it well. Every line was worth the read and was important. There was no fluff and a bunch of cool words. It was all emotion and I liked that. I felt you really put yourself out there and you weren't afraid to share your ideas with people. The style is one I'm not used to, but it's resfreshing to see new things. This was a really good poem hun. Keep it up. Nik

The dead moment came
When I released her
From my last embrace

^^ very hearfelt lines...I could feel the loneliness and sadness you have tried to depict here... well penned...

//"Go north my child
Unto the land
where winter never ends
Where no angel
Will ever dare tread
There you will find
Your throne of bereavement
There you will find
Your crown of the dead"//

^^ loved the ending... specially the throne of bereavement part...

a little bit long for me :) but this would make a beautiful song :)

keep writing :)

I really enjoyed this poem though I must admit I was put off at first by its length, love the way you drew me in, how many of us have sat at night in dread of the next day when some event has blown us away, unable to find sleeps relief as our mind won't stop to let us. The parting and the realisation was well written though the end was a surprise I look forward to the follow on. Excellent poem which as you said took three reads to find the flow well worth it. 5/5 Ray S

This was amazing. I didn't mind the length at all because it was abstract and interesting and far from boring. The emotion was extremely powerful, and I think the shorter lines helped with this.

"And then all too quickly
That dead moment came
When I released her
From my last embrace"
^That part blew me away. Like so so powerful. I think maybe because I can relate to it? but still, amazing :)

I didn't really understand the last stanza, but that's probably just me. I'll read it a couple more times and I hopefully will :) haha.

Anyway, this is incredible, and you are a talented writer :)

5/5 for sure :)

This poem was well written. I guess what caught my eye was the fact that it was really sincere. It was dark, but I also liked that theme because I don't read many dark poems often. Favourite Part:Beneath these careless Stars of night
Without a hope
Within my mind
I merely await

good job. 4/5

Oh my goodness, this touches the core of my heart. I am not fan of dark poems, but this one i really like. I like how it is structured. It left me craven for the next part. Very well done 5/5, kel.