'sunlight surging through green leaves'
^Only has 7 syllables I believe, not 8.

other than that this is such a beautiful write, a great image for the reader. vivid imagery throughout. awesome work, keep it up.

Your mom should be very proud of you, this was beautiful and your words created the scene for the reader, and put them there. Lovely work, keep writing, always and forever..

~MaryAnne

Kool.very good