This was a beautiful display of your emotions, so carefully placed together to form a masterpiece. I felt this poem especially to be deep and detailed, there was much you included and got the reader to feel and understand. I cannot comment on just one stanza or line, they were all equally amazing. I really admire the effort and time you put into your work, may God bless you and keep you always.

5/5 from me, thanks for posting this, it was a pleasure to read a new one, and lift your head up, try not to be down, God loves you!

~MaryAnne

Tempsy,

You wrote this down well and it's very clear how you feel.
Hun, sometimes things don't work out like we want to..I have had a similar thing happen to me, but now after 6 months I can smile again sweetheart..I hope you will be able to smile again someday real soon again too, even with the voice no longer there. There are other beautiful voices too, you know;)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

There are times when things just seem to
fall apart after going smoothly; just hang in
there & it will be okay. A heartfelt write that
goes very deep...take care.

Life is full of ups and downs, step forward and then backward. Some are difficult to deal with, some aren't. That just life. It will get better. Well done.

The absence of your voice
distinguishes comfort--
as solitude pierces deep.

*I love the way you started this. It makes me so sad. Your words are like rocks and they are hitting me hard. I love the imagery, although sad still sound and well worded.*

Fear contaminates; spiraling

*I didn't like how you said spiraling...maybe a different word in its place would sound better to me. or mabye if you left spiraling there to describe the fear and use another word to describe the soul part if you know what I mean.*

a vivacious soul in reverse--
Life transforms from scarlet
dreams into a nightmare.

*I loved this part, but maybe you should use another color to describe the nightmare as you did with the dream*

Energy drains along with lingering
patience as eyelids yawn; exhausted
and lifeless--running on empty.

*I feel like this sometimes..like everything I do has no meaning because I don't want to do it in the first place. I think you described not having energy very well in this stanza. My favorite :) *

It seems as though just yesterday--
everything was progressing yet now
it all has been shifted in reverse.

*Awww this was sad Temps, but it makes me happy to see you releasing your feelings. I know you've been going through a rough time but I have faith that you will be just fine and will keep writing amazing poetry as you did with this one. Keep smiling dear :) I heart you. *skittle hugs* Nik *

Temps
Very heartfelt piece. Losing love is very painful. It is easy for others to say let it go. Sometimes things aren't that easy. We just learn how to block some of the sadness. The pain becomes part of who we are.
Great job!
Take Care
Cindy

The ending was amazing. Any poem with a twist in it is a winner for me. And to me,this poem is a winner indeed.5/5

I would applaud... but i dont think it would make a difference to you.. so... i will leave this comment instead "that was effing amazing, linguistic, and creative... feels like you could paint a picture of your words, congrats!!!"