That was a really good poem. i absoloutly loved its naturall rythm and flow. i really love poems written in this style as i feel they tell a story more than any other. the emotions where raw but captivating especially
"My anger and sorrow
are the only things there.
Their mocking eyes dig
deep within my mind."
really good. the only thing i would advise you is change the line "But unwilling ears to listen" to But ears unwilling to listen. it makes the flow better and also makes more sense.
5/5

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