by The Dark Poet Sep 11, 2009
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
As I sit alone in silence |
by Lady Nik
This was okay. One thing that bothered me is you capitalized random words in your lines and that made this confusing to read. I'd work on that. Your diction is stronger here, but I'd keep working with it. I see the forced rhyme and I'd work on that too. I think this would be better if you weren't trying to rhyme it. Other than that nice job. Nik |