by No Need For A Name Sep 11, 2009
category :
Love, romance /
first love
Lakes and waters |
Once again you need to make your verses stronger if you plan on having these as songs. Its basically 6 short line verses and the rest is copied and pasted as the chorus. The chorus is pretty good but you still need solid verses to compliment them. When is the last time you heard a song with barely no verses just straight chorus and actually enjoyed it? Its not terrible don't get me wrong but their supposed to be songs so they should be longer and stronger an honest 4/5 |
by Loulou
:-( Very sad but understandable a heart broken is a terrible terrible thing Great poem! |