by kelleyana Sep 11, 2009
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
Observing the cloudless blue sky that gleamed its light on me,taking my heart to the right direction it always wants to be. Its warmth quiver the mood and my humor a pure delight. |
Exquisitely Penned, A Splendid and Fanciful Write!!! |
I thought it was really hmm... to find a word for it would be hard. The one that is most closest to beautiful...yet even more beautiful...like the beautiful of the beautifulest. If that makes sense. 5/5. Keep up good work. =] |
I like to comment, but theres no more i can add. But to keep it up. |
by Hollymariee
Since some of the lines rhyme, maybe you would want to seperate your stanzas into four line verses ? It would make it a little easier to read . And there are also a few grammar mistakes .. But thats a minor detail. I really like the content of the poem as well as your wording , you make it very easy to relate to , but also very personal . Very well done , 5/5 |
by Lady Nik
This was a lovely poem dear, I felt that you put alot of emotions into and told a very common story. I don't read many love poems but I enjoyed this one. It was done well and it wasn't sappy and cliche. I love the imagery and your original ideas. A very strong poem. Keep it up hun. Nik |