Powerful and I would hate to be on the receiving end of these words if you actually spoke them to someone. The image of a face snarled in anger came to me as I read. Well done.

Rage comes to mind reading this :) Poisonous words.. like weapons injure and penetrate .
Really well done, the words used and the emotion that emanated is excellent

Such a powerful and strong release of words, your words really sent a shiver down my spine, you know how to make a point! Excellent job, keep it up!

~MaryAnne

Temps
I have to agree with Jommy I can feel the anger and rage in your words. Very powerful emotiiins are radiating from this piece.
Excellent job!

I liked this. There was alot of alliteration and that was fun to see. I think you used some clever word choices as well, which makes your poem more complex. I felt you wrote this very well. And you say you can't start a dark poem...you did and what a wonderful job you did with it. Great work Temps. Glad to see you writing more :) *hugs* Nik

^Invalid statements spew
from thorny lips;
I'm not as gullible as you
believe; I see through those
transparent falsities.^

I have seen this relatable topic often the past couple weeks. I like the way you started with the dark imagery and I like the word choice.

^Hatred dripping from your
dangerous fangs; a hint
of jealousy you are
unwilling to reveal.^

It takes a good instinct sometimes to see through someone's facade.

^Pathetic attempts are
executed drenched in
drama; yet I know better
to steer clear of this
contagious disease.^

I think almost everyone can relate to this because unfortunately I think we all know someone like this.

^A persona of a fool
stands before me;
a fictitious character
weaved together by
threads of immaturity. ^

I absolutely love the ending. It is powerful and creative due to the word choice and your use of a metaphor.

Excellent job!

I dont think the category 'DARK' is suitable for this piece...it should have been under 'DARKEST OF DARK' :)

I am trying to catch up with some great poems of our club today and so far all of them made me smile but this one made my mouth open wide....lolol

Awesome...just loved the choice of words and the way emotions/anger/feelings...were expressed.

Great write dear

all the best and take care

A strong piece, very well written and expressed! Loved it. Great word choice, and very well put together. Excellent job :)

Invalid statements spew
from thorny lips

I like the description in this line for it shows
the character of a person, very good!

weaved together by
threads of immaturity.

Another one that I like, threads of immaturity!..Good job!

Congratulations Temps, what a well-deserved win!

God bless you!

~MaryAnne

Congrats on the win, Temps.

I am sure you did justice to the one you intended this for:)

God bless:)

5/5 Ingrid

Congrats on the win :)
Way to go girl!
Love Cindy

Every poem of you always make me wow!!
your such a good poetic person...

This hit me right on the mark. I've seen this kind you speak of many, many times. You managed to get your point across without vulgarity.

I like how your words were powerful, yet, classy. You kept it classy, and that's exactly why this poem impressed me. 5/5. Bliss..

I love it, its to the point, hits where it has to hurt...

amazingly written...

A powerful write... with excellent word choice! Just awesome.

A powerful write... with great word choice. Just awesome.

With the first verse You STRUCK A GOOD CORD!

Nice writing Skills I'm impressed and your poem is getting Favored maybe even u too lol Very Classic

X Emotiionsz

I love your work.
Its beautiful.

5/5

Nice written (: