1st stanza, 2nd line, is it supposed you be "your" ?
2nd stanza, 2nd line. Is is supposed to be "it"?

Its a good write, although i think it could have flowed a little better in certain places. And it ended sort of suddenly...like there should be more stanzas before the end? I duno, thats just my opinion. But apart from that its a great poem. keep it up.