Heartless

Rip my heart out with your bare hands,
I tried, but failed to fulfill your demands,
Was I ever the one you wished for?
You got greedy, and wanted more.
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Portrays how much hurt this person has caused youby the opening line. Very powerful start.

Why did it have to end like this?
Now I'm the one left to reminisce,
Did I really deserve to be cheated on?
I really loved you, but now you're gone.
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Portrays that you have alot of unanswered questions that need answering for you to move on. It also says you still love them no matter what they do. Very well written.

I try to relive the good times we had,
If any at all, they were all so bad,
Yet still I love you after so long,
Even though I know that it's wrong.
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Portrays that even though you try and relive the good memories you can't actually seem to think of any becasue they were all so bad and not actually worth remembering and also says that loving this person is wrong because of what they've done, what ever that may bee. Very heartfelt piece, throughout, 5/5. Em

Wow thats was really good. i loved the imagrey in this poem.

I agree with Nik above well done on the new write you always display your talent in every poem but the next one must be stories of flowers and hearts lol =]
Excellent job your stanzas flowed into each other perfectly and your rhyming scheme was flawless

Yay a new poem :) see I knew you wouldn't stop writing, you're too talented for that. Now next poem I want you to write about fairies and pixie dust mkay :) lol jk. Lovely poem hun. Always pure and from the heart. *huggles* Nik