Comments : My Mystical Place

  • 15 years ago

    by vintage darling

    My favourite stanza:Nothing can go wrong here,
    Its the perfect escape,
    Nobody is rejected,
    But accepted with open arms,

    It was really well written. I loved the feeling of perfection and utopia that this poem possessed. I can relate so well, because it is a feeling i get when i am in love. Thanks for sharing this pretty poem :)

    good job.

  • 15 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    In this world I see,
    Anything can happen,
    All so mystical,
    Just like a perfect fairy tale,

    ^I don't think the "Just" in the last line is necessary and I think it kinda takes away from the poem a little bit. I would consider deleting it.

    Dragons soar up high,
    Gnomes roam down below,
    All in a world alike,
    A place of peace and serenity,

    ^I like this, it sets a calming and mellow mood.

    Nothing can go wrong here,
    Its the perfect escape,
    Nobody is rejected,
    But accepted with open arms,

    ^"Its" should be "It's". "Nobody is rejected" I think this might sound better as "No one is rejected".

    Faries and pixies fly as one,
    Vampires adn werewolves united again,
    Eveyone and everything works hand in hand,
    Not one left out,

    ^Second line, "adn" = "and".

    This is my mystical place
    You look and see for yourself,
    A place you can dream on your own,
    Where happiness truely exists,
    ^Last line, the comma would work better as a period.

    I really liked this poem, it was calming, but at the same time exilliarating. Like you want to find this place of yours, or create your own (: Beautiful imagery and you expressed the emotions here flawlessly. Really, amazing job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I liked this alot. I felt you painted a very pretty picure of a place we all wish could exist. I love the imagery and the simple diction you used. A really strong poem hun :) keep it up. Nik

  • 15 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    I love the idea of a "mystical place." A very good idea for your write. And well done. I wonder how many of your readers will think about their own mystical places? Thanks.