by miracle Sep 19, 2009
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
Save me, take me out of this place, |
by Jay Perry Jr
Good rhyming good poem i like it 5/5 |
I think you should work more on structure. The flow was a bit choppy. You had the rhyming down okay, I really liked how you rhymed nightmare with hair, that was a sweet sort of line. It just needs to have a little more structure to make it more enjoyable to read. |
by lovemehateme
Very well written. Tha rhyme of tha poem flowed rely well. 5/5 |