Hi there! I personally like your rhyme. Its simple and quite catchy haha. Last stanza is my favourite part because its bring out the feeling of mine that how much I miss my beloved :P somehow I'm not sure why hmm ... just the romantic feeling aren't strong enough o_O anyway its a lovely piece of work! 4/5 :D peace out~

1:: The starry, starry night
2:: you are so, so bright
3:: such beauty you hold;
4:: such people you please...

5:: The way you are scattered in the sky;
6:: it makes me want to fly
7:: hold your start dust
8:: and feel you glittery light.

9:: but when night end and morning comes,
10:: when can I see you again, my dear?
11:: when can I stare at you beauty once more?

~line 7:: STAR not start?
~line 8:: YOUR not you?
~line 9:: ENDS not end?

~I like the style of this poem,line 6 feels forced but i love that stanza! Something about it makes it seem magical. Not bad.

~IBE

Also you need commas and full stops at the end of your sentances.

This piece is quite magical and intriging. Well written, 5/5. Em