This is hot! I'll look forward to part two...

This is pretty good but I felt you could have given us a lot more detail then you did. There were a couple spelling mistakes but thats not hard to fix at all. I think a part 2 about your turn would be good haha I gave this a 4/5 :)

When is part two.... phewww hot....... dear santa can i have mercy lol xxxxx

Good suspence...but take care.