Comments : One breath

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    She looks in the mirror everyday,
    With a plastic smile fixed in place,
    During school no one will see,
    Everything that hides behind that face.

    *I love this poem I just wanted to say that first. But this stanza was my favorite. I can relate a lot to fixing myself up and putting on a smile so no one sees that I'm falling apart inside. I love how well this piece flows from line to line. Like a story unfolding. I felt like I knew the girl and like I could feel her pain. Which is very good, means you are good at telling a story :] I think you're doing well as a poet and I like your style of writing. Keep it up. Nik*