by Martha Sep 25, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
The strongest shout, |
by Love Panda
I felt this poem was slightly awkward. The structure was different in a sence it felt as though there were 2 structure, twisting within each other...oddly good. Some of the words you used are perfect, controlling the poem in the dirrection you wish it to move. Though some of your lines do seam very forced. Not bad, though could be better. |