Let me drift into your majestic realm,
Where your land may pierce into heaven,
With waterfalls and meadows lay,
All out days will end in luxurious ways.
*Should "out" be "ours"
As night falls, our whispers will only be heard,
Our Touch will only be felt,
Under the covers, there's no need for words,
Kiss our Lips, each one to melt.
*In the first line I'd take out "only" it messes up the flow of the piece. Same thing with the second line. Love the last two lines though. Very simple and sweet like the first two people have said.*
Tickle Thy Senses, Tickle Thy Speech,
Place your hands within my reach,
Eject my sincere love I will Never,
My sincere Love is always Forever.
*A very sweet and tender poem. I quiet enjoyed reading this. Keep it up. -Nik*