Very well done, this was simply stunning. I really am not good with only writing a few words on each line, but you have done an astonishing job. I am sorry if I have no critism or suggestions, the vocabulary was intense and created passion and "lightning fingertips" was something new. Keep up the growing and good work of your poetic journey, you will get far.

God bless you!

~MaryAbbe

Wow, I spelled my name wrong, I am so out of it...

I forgot to add that your verses capture more than just the reader's attention but their hearts, I am betting many will fall in love with this piece.

:)

~MaryAnne

The start of a fiery passion unfolding. You
take the reader through each stage of love..
very nice!

Wonderful write dear. There is so much passion in the verse and it was displayed in a great tone. Excellent job. 5/5

Take Care,
Kay

I like how you created a rhythm , even though it doesn't rhyme . The lines flow really nicely together, and your wording is lovely . There's nothing to critique , 5/5 .

A wonderful piece of love's passion.
Excellent!
Take care

A wonderful paean to passion. Love the phrasing in this poem, 'primal pounding', 'raw primordial lust' just capture the essence of our ancient desires.