I have to be honest with you - I did love this write except for some of the vocabulary. Its obvious you used a theasurus & parts were forced because of this. I did love this poem a lot, but the words and their complexity at times kind of ruined it for me. Because I know this is not what you normally write. Your words are not this far advanced. Maybe you are improving by advancing your words, but I dont think these came from the top of your head. I did like this though, so dont be discouraged, I just feel like I you swallowed a theasurus & this was the ending result. Keep it up though, its never a bad thing to be learning new words at your age.

Haunting write... the darkness is so prominent in your words... well penned...

Unresponsive to the
enticing waves of notes,
that come waltzing
from breaking horizons.

^^ the first stanza captivated me ... with its splendid imagery...

wonderful read :)

A very clever write, MaryAnne...lot sof difficult words in it, but nonetheless I could understand what you were saying.

I think you did well on this!

God bless,

5-5 Ingrid

I like this. It opened very, very, well. Although, some of your words did seem a bit...languished? I've read many a dark piece, and this work measures well. I think you need a little practice with some of that "olde" vocabulary, but you show such strong promise! Keep it up. I wish I had some of your talent.