Cruel Time

'Where in past seasons I had run'
^Run should be ran I believe

'A cold moon burns in Autumn sky
Its rays shining on swirling glass
I hear the ocean breeze's sigh
And feel the fleeting lifetimes pass.'
^Really awesome imagery & descriptions here.

This is so sad and full of deep emotion. I feel like you did really good here, not only with the emotion aspect but also the imagery and how it really deepened the mood as well.

That was deep ... a wonderful peom on life... while reading it flowed so easily... and I could imagine the waves and the autumn sky...

A cold moon burns in Autumn sky
Its rays shining on swirling glass
I hear the ocean breeze's sigh
And feel the fleeting lifetimes pass.

^^ loved the metaphors used to express the fleeting time... beautifully penned

Bright tower lights shine from afar
And marble clouds drift from the sea
I sadly gaze upon a star
As cruel time claims her victory.

^^Time is always victorius... it slips faster if we try to catch it... lovely lines

wonderful read :)

A sense of loss either in nature or life. A decision the reader has to make from your words.

As I read this I felt like something that was
bountiful & magnificent is now gone..eroded
with age..a touching write. Take care.