Rebecca..well..that was a little bit off the flow.
I didn't really like the rhyme, it felt so forced.
The title wasn't that captivating either.

"This is like dying.
Unexacting grief is what I feel.
My heart taken
Against my will."
^
I don't think this unrhymed stanza was supposed to be here, made the flow more forced. It felt like you couldn't rhyme at the end so you had to give it a shot wih free verse.

The capitalized letter at the beginning of the lines weren't all necessary, some of them was completing the lines so..

Write on (:

This is beautiful, something I can really relate to being seperated from someone you love. I really liked the flow, and the imagery was beautiful. Hmm looked like a stormy beach in my head anyways great job.. 5/5