What a sweet, and heart-warming poem! It makes me think of everything that's beautiful in this world. Rainbows, chocolate, sunshine, it all came at me so quickly! It was a wonderful rush! Awesome write!!! (I wish I could vote higher then a 5)

mandy :)

Simple, but the form was interesting.. I have not heard of it yet. I might have to try it.

I like this form and its a hard one to do as
well, but you managed to write it well..good
work :)

A lovely poem and the words sway with movement - nicely done

Just catching up on my commenting. You did very well with the form. I am glad Samia brought it to the site for us. Your words are soothing and makes the reader want to dance, cheek to cheek, or at least it did me, with their lover. Well done.

Very Nicely Done!!!

Though I am not familiar with the style I enjoy the words, the romantic feeling and the meaning behind it. As always a beautiful piece, an enjoyable read.
Paul...

So sorry for commenting so late, I haven't been very active lately. Anyway I loved the form of this poem! You used such short and simple words that truly seemed to dance around each other, the beat and passion was there and shined so strongly. Very lovely Ingrid, nice job!

~MaryAnne

The staccato rhythm lends itself wonderfully to this sensual poem of yearning and desire. Superb.

Nice execution of the form!

Can you imagine that I was searching for this format and your poem appeared?

I hope everything is OK on your side dear lady, it's been so long but you were always in my thoughts. Glad to see your beautiful poetry on this site :)

Samia

Incredible! The flow of this piece is amazing - almost hectic. Obviously the brilliant structure adds heavily to that and the content itself is superb. Added to favourites.
All the best, Ingrid.

You have written such a 'real' poem here Ingrid.
A poem that makes me feel like I am actually dancing on a floor somewhere, with this lady in my arms, as I read each word that you have written.
You have given this poem a life of its own, and placed me into a world of dreamy thoughts and wishes. Wonderful work Ingrid!