I like this one but at the end if should be "left" not "leaved," this way it makes more sense. Other than that, flawless write, 5/5. Em

This was sooo sad, the ending was heartbreaking. I can imagine someone staring a boy in the park and then him revealing why he's sad. Very heartbreaking and painful. Melody is right, nobody should feel the need to die because someone left them without saying goodbye, but unfortunetly in life this happens. Well done, this was another good write from you. (:

Good work deary :) this was really said but like Melody said your grammer is getting so much better. I felt you did a nice job of explaining the pain this boy felt. I can really relate to what you're saying. Keep it up hun :) Nik

Good jop!really!bravoo

Its certain deserves with beatiful grammar good vote=)!

Oh my gosh! - this is the best ive read from you by far! great structure, nicly worded and very strong/emotional. a great read! well done. IBE

A very nice read!!

i liked the way your poem turned into a mini story and it flowed very smoothly.

hhahaha. nice job!!!

:)

Better watch your grammar ok?

hahahaha. i love it.

~mika