The Ghost of You

I'm literally crying at the moment... i could relate to this so so much... you words were so powerful. and showed such emotion that is so relatable... like how you repeated "and you're never coming back" i know exactly how that feels, you keep having to tell yourself that the person you loved isn't coming back because everything inside you just tries to block it out and make the death just a surreal thing that just couldn't have happened.. anyway sorry for my rambling. but this is amazing, one of the best poems i have ever read. well done 5/5

Nik, this is a wonderful work of love lost, and the pain from the heart. Very nicely done. Very nicely done, indeed.

Death is such an incredible thing for the simple fact that we could never fathom just how complicated it is. Its almost impossible for an adult who has experienced death many times to understand, let alone a child. One mistake or unfortunate accident and its all over forever, kind of scary really.

You should try and write full sentances or maybe even paragraphs. Seems like you take a line and chop in it half because its going to be long. Its almost like cutting your thought in half at times when it would have more of an impact if you hit the reader with all of it at once and your flow would improve much much more. Your imagery is awesome though thats for sure and this is another 5/5 great job girl GG23

"Your voice has become a
muted noise in my heart"
This is my favorite line. I really can relate to your poem. The year of my grandmother has just passed and I finally visited her grave since I wasn't able to make it to her funeral. You are such an amazing writer. The words just captivated me into a teary mode. Water works and memories. 5/5
-Waking Freedom

Aww.. This was so sad. I can relate to it too. The first anniversary of my great grandfather's death is coming up. I can't believe it's been a whole year. I still think about him everyday, and like you said in the poem, the ghost of him still remains. Lovely poem.

--Cayce