Comments : 11+

  • 15 years ago

    by Spirit

    It's nice but it has a ways to go.
    At some times there aren't enough words, at other times it's too wordy. (If that makes since) I think that it really has potential and can go far. You might also want to add so puntuation.

    Tell them I was impressed.

  • 15 years ago

    by Alone in the crowd

    Thank you I will most deffinately tell them this. Thanks for reading this, I believe this will give them some confidence.