I Can't Wait To Hate You

by Nathan Turner   Oct 14, 2009


There's an empty hole in my once strong heart
If I don't get you back I'm sure it'll break apart
What's wrong with me? I thought I was getting over you?
Now I don't know what's for the best like I used to do

When we laid there and promised we'd never stop loving each other I meant it
You've really captured my vulnerable heart, every single bit
In the end promises are made to be broken
I feel so pathetic and sad now that I know there are no words ever to be spoken

Whenever I look in the sky and see a dove soaring high
I'll always remember you and maybe cry
I can't wait to hate you
But for now, I guess I'll have to carry on feeling blue

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  • 15 years ago

    by Dying Beautifully

    I liked it... It's cute and I know what you mean. It's like you know you should despise the person for all they've done but you damn well can't.

    Good Job Nathan,
    Rebbeca

  • 15 years ago

    by Nathan Turner

    Yeah mate, that helps me alot, all the ideas. Thanks :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    I know the feelings you are trying to express and on this site there are many such poems a lot better written than yours though it has great potential.
    The meter and flow is not that good and it makes your poem a bit unconvincing, as if you are contriving it and settling for nothing better, if you can get my gist.

    L4 of 1st Stanza
    Now I don't know what's (for the) best like I used to do(are these words necessary)

    The first two lines of the 2nd Stanza
    Are just one example of what I mean it breaks up a reasonably good first stanza

    The 3rd line is a conclusion and it stand by itself which leaves the the 4th line hanging and senseless

    3rd Stanza
    When ever I look into the sky and see a soaring dove up high,
    I remember you and my heart wants to cry,
    I guess I will have to go on feeling blue,
    While waiting for the time I will hate you.

    My stanza is not good but I think it is better than yours.

    I am trying to show you the possibilities that are availiable if you edit and edit your poem and write any ideas down before you change it, use your rhymning dictionary it gives you an extra arrow in your bow. A excellent poem is usually never rushed it looks as if you rushed this. Hope this helps. 4/5 Ray S