by Kurt Oct 21, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Frozen deep within that chest |
by silvershoes
Congrats on winning the contest! Great poem, I especially enjoyed the continuous imagery and interesting word choices. "What star signs have you crossed?" <-- This brings to mind Romeo & Juliet by Shakespeare. Star-crossed lovers. My favorite word in the entire poem is 'lugubrious,' and you used it correctly! Excellent work. I would add a comma after 'deep' in the first line of the last stanza. Other than that, flawless write (by my standards). Keep writing! |
by Sami Cakes
Great poem. I really like the fact that I could tell the emotion...I love it. |
by Sami Cakes
Great poem. I really like the fact that I could tell the emotion...I love it. |
by Skyfire
Ahhh....eerily truthful. Very nice rhyming. |
Wow... this is such a powerful poem. It really hit me... I love the line "Beginnings require conclusions." You should add that to your quotes! Well done .. |