by Loveless Dreamer Oct 22, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Broken, smashed, gone forever, |
Im not forcing anything |
by Love Panda
Sporry, i couldnt read all this, i was put off by the forcefulness of the rhymes. you need to re think the rhyming scheme,the words your using, etc.to me this isnt your best, but it could be, its there, you just need to chisel away the roughness. stop forcing it.IBE |
I know...thx for being honest. At the time I wrote this I was kinda having writers block. |