Very creepy and atmospheric. You did a great job in collaboration. Reads as though written by one person.

I thought this was well done. ironically i've had a growing interest to write "dark" style poetry. i think i might favorite this and use it as a comparison to my attempts.

thanks for sharing and you really did do a fantastic job.

Wow... this poem is amazing! So deep, so emotional, and so expressive... I haven't read a poem like this and it really intrigued me... I'm so curious to know what inspired you to write this! Please PM me about it :) Great job with the poem!

The opening lines..made me shiver..but so catchy..nice nice work

The very smell causes my mind
to split into fragments, while my
skin swathes around my bones
squeezing me...bringing me
to a never ending low.
>>FLAWLESS verse

I can't cease the tormented
laughter crawling through
my psyche. Spitting this seed of
hatred within my core.
>>my holly god.. the tormented laugh..this must be
my fav stanz