This was wonderfully written. I love the poetic ways you've used to describe this character, easily and so naturally describing the perfection and the falling. Just as you said, "That heart broken woman is gone lightening fast."

"Her scream piercing stone as it reaches deaf ears"
^I love this line. It's been used though I still find it very effective an chilling. A scream that should be heard but falling on deaf ears. Very well done.

The only thing I didn't like was the ending you've put here. It seemed the scheme was just thrown all out of proportion even if I liked the prospect of it. Being the medium, as if a cat for a witch correct? 5/5

This is amazingly written. Flawless is every way, 5/5 from me. Em

'Her hair amber waves with onyx black eyes.'
^Your words are extremely descriptive, and well done. I just want to put out though that onyx and black are nearly the same thing so dont think you need both here.

'She's standing so still so completely serine.'
^Still love your descriptions [ie. purple trees--very imaginatiave.], however serine I believe should be 'serene'

'She looks to be breaking, her seams coming out.'
^Didnt really like coming out.. how about bursting or a synoymn for bursting? or maybe unraveling? or breaking?

'Her fragile frame bending as she falls to the ground.'
^Nice alliteration here.

Wow this was truly amazing. Imaginative and something that blew me away. Nicely done :]

A very colorful poem. in certain parts it almost seems like a puzzle to figure out. which is good. it means that you put a lot of thought into it, and people need to think a little bit before they can understand it.

nice job
~Ben