If only we could live in peace and harmony in the world, pass on to our children a love that could heal all the hurt. This is a wonderful poem, comparing the beauty of the land to the ugliness of war and greed. excellent!

I love it. Myryn. Some vocab was really hard for me to understand, so I had to use the dictionary and read it twice..and I think I'll read it thrice too =D

Skyline's magic shade and hue
observing nights soaked with dew
be not the prophesied harms
but simple unstudied charms
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This stanza has beauty that only a good poet could perceive, that's why I couldn't perceive it lol. No seriously, it has this vague beauty that you cannot resist but love.

How many lives could be saved?
How many lies must you rave?
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Amazing, simply superb and exquisite, those lines tell so much in so little. Very captivating and heartfelt.

I love the piece and you did an absolutely definitely wonderful job with the syllable count, syllables are my phobia when writing but you did this wonderfully. I truly am in love with your writings Myryn
Write on~

Myryn,

You know when I read your poetry I expect no less from you. You have some a beautiful vocabulary that makes your poems really stunning. When I first read this piece I was thrown at how well you created a poem with such a simple structure, I am not usually fond of poems written with an original structure such as this but the words just flowed and I think you did such a wonderful job in writing this.

I must say well done of the rhyme, I'm not fond of rhyming poems but I didn't even tell this rhymed until the second stanza and even then it was subtle so the effect was elegant for me.. You didn't use too many common rhymes which is why I found it effective.

"How many lives could be saved?
How many lies must you rave?"

The only part of this poem I didn't like was the above two lines, I felt as the one rhetorical question was enough and I didn't like the rhyme.. I felt it just didn't fit in.

I enjoyed the symbolism throughout the poem expecially with the use of falcon. Overall I found this to be an enjoyable read. Well done.

-Mel

Myryn your vocabulary and the way you paint such amazing imagery with your words holds me in awe of your extreme talent with words.

I learn so much from your poetry hun.

Balmy days and moonlit nights
watch falcons fly out of sight
while the waves of virgin sands
unfold the unknown at hand
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Love this stanza !!!!

I think your strict syllable count made it flow so smoothly.

Grant this place an end to war
restore its legend and lore
we're the children of this zeal
our own land you shall not steal
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Touching ending hun

Wonderfully penned ...