by Chelsey Nov 4, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
As I lay in my bed all cozy and warm |
Very interesting poem. You did a very good work in transposing feelings of despondency to a very absorbing poem. |
Very interesting poem. You did a very good work in transposing feelings of despondency to a very absorbing poem. |
by Em
Well written full off emotion. It's sad to think of it like this but lie goes on even though at times we question why. Wonderful, sad piece, 5/5. Em |
by Ingrid
Why do people do these things indeed..a very good question.. |
Poetically I found the flow off a bit, but as I got into it I realized it kind of has a musical feel to it and if I sang it, that problem actually went away lol I thought it was a great dark subject that really makes you stop and think about life and what we really have, it also hopefully makes you want to put yourself out there and help someone who doesn't have that. Great write Chelsey, I really enjoyed it. |